英语六级作文: High Salaries or Career Development? 高工资还是职业发展?
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic High Salaries or Career Development? You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)有的大学毕业生选择工作时主要看重高工资,而有的则认为良好的职业发展空间才是更重要的
2)阐述他们各自的考虑
3)表明你的看法
High Salaries or Career Development?
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行文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出两种不同的选择,提纲第2点要求分别阐述这两种选择各自的理由,提纲第3点要求表明我的看法,由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:指出大学毕业生选择工作时不同的侧重点:注重高工资和注重职业发展空间;对比阐述他们各自的理由;表明我的倾向并说明理由。
高分范文
High Salaries or Career Development?
There are more and more people looking for jobs every year, but they have different views about what kind of job they should choose. [1]Some of them focus their attention on the jobs that promise high salaries. [1]Others show a preference for those jobs that offer chances to learn skills and advancement possibilities.
[2]people holding the first view usually think that more money will result in more happiness. [3]With a lot of money in hand, they will be able to enjoy a rich life. Otherwise, they will suffer from depression [4]due to lack of enough money. [2]However, the holders of the second view argue that one should develop his skills as roundly as possible. [5]It is career development that counts most. Without development, you will be outrun by others and fall behind the times sooner or later.
In my view, career development is the right choice because career may give us long term satisfaction [6]while high salary would give us short term happiness. Besides, [7]generally speaking, a good career development will bring high salaries sooner or later. So I will [8]give my vote to the career development first and then high salaries.
【亮点点评】
[1]用于引出两种不同的观点或倾向。
[2]用于对比分析两种观点各自的理由。
[3]with+宾语+宾补的独立结构充当状语。
[4]因为缺钱。
[5]强调句型,此处是强调句子的主语。
[6]while引导比较状语从句,意为然而。
[7]一般来说。
[8]选择。
佳句临摹
1.佳句:Others show a preference for those jobs that offer chances to learn skills and advancement possibilities.
临摹:近些年来,越来越多的人开始喜欢洋快餐。
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2.佳句:However, the holders of the second view argue that one should develop his skills as roundly as possible.
临摹:然而,持第二种观点的人认为体育明星们为社会做出了杰出的贡献,因此应该得到特殊待遇。
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3.佳句:Career may give us long
ng term satisfaction while high salary would give us short term happiness.
临摹:我们之间的共同之处使我们的关系牢固,而不同之处则都会我们如何相互理解。
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【KEY】
1. In recent years, there are more and more people who have showed a preference for western fast food.
2. However, the holders of the second view argue that since sports stars have made great contributions to the society, they deserve some special treatment.
3. The similarity between us makes our relationship solid while the difference teaches us how to understand each other.